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Rorschach’s journal

September 29, 1985

These are the last few pages of this journal, the tome ending with both the season and the month.  It could have been planned.  Sense a disturbing future ahead.

The city is buzzing with something.  Can’t tell what it is.  Will present itself in time undoubtedly, but until then, forced to wander the alleyways.  Restless.  

Muggings are too commonplace for proper health.  Stopped three tonight.  It’s a simple task; my face strikes fear on first glance.  A reputation is nothing to shrug, it is more valuable than a gun or a knife.  With my name on the street, the fear rests already in the stomachs of New York’s vermin like a bomb waiting silently for my signal to blow.  With my hands in my pockets I take them out at the knees.  Greater than flight or x-ray vision: this is my superpower.

With one move their noses split their brains. Simple and quick.  Two men are dead tonight.  Let the last one live.

He was twelve years old.  Big for his age, threatening an old woman with a fully-automatic weapon.  He was holding it wrong.  Broke both his hands.  Perhaps time away from that gun will make him reconsider his young life.  Perhaps in six months we’ll meet again and part with spinal fluid running mingled with blood down his face.  

I pace this place from one end to another.  Nothing amiss.  Nothing to justify this unsettled feeling.  Stopped in on Daniel Dreiberg.  It’s Saturday night.  Knew he wouldn’t be home.  He spends his Saturdays with his namesake down in topknot territory.  I killed a topknot earlier.

No need to break his lock this visit.  Had both the patience and time to sneak in.  Climbing rooftops satisfied a little of my roaming spirit, and scouring his residence for openings preoccupied my wandering mind.  He left his bedroom window cracked.  I can move around his house in the dark now a days, he hasn’t redecorated since we were teammates.  The same applies to his pantry.

His place is like a restaurant.  He saves me hundreds of wellfare dollars.  

Had some pork and beans; stole his spoon.  Will return it next time.  What kind of house guest leaves his host’s place a mess?  Certainly not the kind that stuffs his pockets with his sugar cubes.  Daniel buys them individually wrapped in industrial sized bags.  

They are better than drugs and so convenient its like he's asking me to take them.  Don't think he even suspects they are vanishing.

Crunching sugar I slipped back out into the starlight of early fall, a lot of night left to cover.  The likelihood of finding what’s keeping me anxious seems small, the turmoil too quiet to manifest just now.  My instincts are heightened.

Something big is coming.  Something global.  

Need a new journal.
Sue me I wanted to write something, in specific I wanted to write a Rorschach journal about him stealing things from Dan's house. Its a little ooc, but Its got a punchline and that alone is ooc for Rorschach

Based on Watchmen
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iheartslashers Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
XD Big bang for Rorschach is that he needs a new journal XD Aw...Poor guy. TT
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AvatarLogan Featured By Owner May 4, 2009
Awasome!!! Very cool will you write more?!
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner May 4, 2009  Professional General Artist
Not of this specific story, no... maybe more little oneshots though
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Dark-S1ayer Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2009
Hey, nice to see I'm not the only one attempting this... ^^ Nice job.
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Nice.
You got his personality down, his fragmented and trailing thought process in words.
Brilliant.
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Professional General Artist
Thanks, I'm getting better at Rorschachian prose, i've been practicing.
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Practice makes perfect.
^^
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Isotoperuption Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
you captured Rorschach's style of writing and how he words thins quite well. I really love this work :)
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thenumber42 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Student Traditional Artist
Hey, have you seen this? [link]

"Sentence fragments. My trademark."
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Professional General Artist
That's hilarious
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lXlDumbasslXl Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
...I now intend to find all I can about him...

And I don't know why, but the whole 'stole his spoon' thing has glued itself to the walls of this mind...
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Professional General Artist
The novel is great, I heartily recommend it. Its not a long read, you can finish it in a day or so ^^
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lXlDumbasslXl Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Which, in the usual method of this mans reading, means within a few hours. Seriously.
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Professional General Artist
Yeah it is a comic book... you could blow through it really fast if you wanted to
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lXlDumbasslXl Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Just browsing a few sites to order now...

I would go buy it from our local comic store, but I'm pretty sure we don't have one and if we do, I honestly haven't a clue WHERE it is.

Oh and I know waterstones won't stock this either. Sods law prohibits it.
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Professional General Artist
Britain sounds deprived
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lXlDumbasslXl Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Well according to the world view, we're all Depressed, sarcastic, apologetic, dull buggers.

But in reply, WE have a reason.

No, not because it rains alot.
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silverblades2 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Hobbyist
This is fantastic! You got the style down perfectly and I love the way you described Daniel's house. The part that must take the win though is,

Something big is coming. Something global.

Need a new journal.

That was just perfect.
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silentviewer339 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
lol.....sounds like the relationship me and my friend share.....he comes to my place for dinner.....i use his place for breakfast....hahaa...AND I SCH...U NVR GET TO FINISH YOUR OWN LUNCH....U ABAnDON YOUR'S FOR SOMEBODY ELSES. LOL
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smeagol92055 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very good, but only one minor nitpick, from someone who's read Watchmen a few dozen times:
Rorschach doesn't ever use the word "I". Hi sentences flow more like "Saw dog in gutter. had no reaction. Must remember to beat living piss out of neighbor later. Hrm."

Like that. Rorschach sees himself as outside of humanity, since he's so morally beyond what anyone would consider normal, even though he's incredibly violent and unforgiving in his methods. He doesn't consider himself as lumped in with the rest of the human filth that creeps over the surface of the world, and as such, he doesn't use personal pronouns.

But it was a good fanfic in any case. Keep it up, Jame!
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Professional General Artist
Mk, removed a bunch of "I"s... went back and read some of his entries from the book and he's got a few personal pronouns when using a possessive or speaking about his mind. I also left the ones that made the paragraphs too confusing without them. I hope its okay still.
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smeagol92055 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Groovy. It's a great journal entry, although one more minor thing, I don't think he would say that he's stealing from Dreiberg; I don't think he'd steal, just help himself to the food and chalk it up to Dan's charity. But that's your call; it was well-written in any case.
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Professional General Artist
I guess I could change "steal" to "take" without it killing much. I liked the bluntness of "steal", it turns the sentence into my punchline, but he doesn't make punchlines unless they are ironic anyway...
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Professional General Artist
I never noticed that he avoids his own pronoun... good eye! I'll fix it
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KazenoKisara Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009
Dude, that was wonderful... you really captured him perfectly! Love the ending, hehe :D
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Professional General Artist
Oh thanks! I was afraid I was pushing it a little far with that "Better than Crack" line.
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KazenoKisara Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Nah, it's Rorschach, he's been exposed to the dregs of society so he'd know :P it was awesome dude
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Okay- WOW.
Just-
Just WOW.
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jameson9101322 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Professional General Artist
I'm hoping this is a good 'wow'
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0ArmoredSoul0 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very much so.
Twas EPIC.
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